From Rochelle Wisoff-Fields – “Every Friday authors from around the world gather here to share their 100-words and offer constructive crit and encouragement to each other. This creates a wonderful opportunity for free reading of very fresh fiction! Readers are encouraged to comment as well.”
Links are included at the end of this post for Rochelle’s blog, and for more Friday Fictioneers stories.
The weekly writing prompt is from a photo posted by Rochelle:
Garrett reached around the crowd of people and grabbed the toy Anabella wanted. Why hadn’t he just bought it for her yesterday when she pointed it out? But no, he was in a hurry, rushing her past the booths and out to the car. Watching the game had been more important to him than enjoying the street fair with his little girl, or stopping to buy her a special toy.
Now he was in a hurry again, but for a very different reason. As he hurried to the hospital Garrett prayed Anabella would live to play with her new toy.
This is my first time trying this writing challenge, and it took several drafts before I finally hit ‘Publish’!
Visit Rochelle’s blog and read her entry for this week, Circle In A Spiral, as well as other Friday Fictioneers entries. If you like to write and like a challenge, find out how you can join Friday Fictioneers.
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Hearing His Voice 
Cherish our gifts from God. They are precious and few. This touched my heart ♥
Shenine
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aww. poor kid. well done.
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Well, I’m glad you clicked ‘Publish”, because this is a fine story, so I hope you will return. A lot to think about with this story. What’s important in life… guilt… I’ve put less important things before my family earlier in my life, sometimes thinking it was the right thing to do.
Maybe Garrett put Anabella in the hospital with his hurry. I do hope she got to play with her toy.
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Thank you, I’m glad I did too! It’s always easier to see the right decisions when we’re looking back, so we just have to learn from them and go on.
Garrett’s heavy guilt does seem like he contributed to her being in the hospital. Maybe we’ll check in on them in a future story.
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I’ll be waiting…
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Wow. This one grabbed at my heart. So touching. Hope she makes it.
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Thank you! I hope she does too.
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Nicely done, and welcome aboard.
Yes, it sometimes takes several drafts 🙂
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Thank you so much! I just found your comment, for some reason WP/Akismet put it in Spam, along with a few other valid comments. Sorry!
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Welcome to FF’s. NIce beginning. A sad one but well done. Hope he’s learned his lesson. Want to read more.
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For some reason, my comment didn’t post, so adding another. A short one this time. Welcome to FFers. A nice beginning. Sad but well done. Hope he’s learned his lesson. Be sure to come back. Would like to read more.
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Thank you for visiting and for your comments, they both ended up showing up after all 🙂 I’m looking forward to writing more for FF.
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Welcome to FF’s. A nice but sad one. There is a lesson to be learned here and I hope he remembers to set his priorities right from now on. He needs to get that toy, ut it on her pillow or bedside table so she can see it when she wakes up. Her smile alone will cleanse away his guilt.
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Thank you for the welcome and comments! The toy on her pillow is a great idea 🙂
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Awww…this just broke my heart, bescause i understand how it can be sometimes for parents. I hope she gets better to play with the toy and next time he is a little more patient and attentive. Thanks so much for stopping by mine
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Thank you for visiting and commenting!
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What a sad story and a good reminder to appreciate what is truly important. I hope Annabella lives to play with that toy, too. Welcome to Friday Fictioneers. I joined recently, too, and have really enjoyed it!
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Thank you! I’m looking forward to reading your stories, and the stories of the other FF’s. See you again soon 🙂
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Welcome and a poignant story to begin your time with the Fictioneers.
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Thank you! It’s an interesting challenge I’m happy to participate in.
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If only we could see into the future. Would we make different choices? Poignant take on the prompt.
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Sadly though, life is full of ‘if only’s’. Thank you for your comments.
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Welcome aboard the Friday Fictioneer’s bus, my dear.
Your first foray was a beautiful, if sad story that tugged at my heartstrings. very well done. hope to see you again soon.
Aloha,
Doug
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Thank you Doug, I’ve enjoyed the ride 🙂 I do plan to participate again.
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welcome and nicely done. Why is tomorrow so much more valuable than today ?
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Thank you, I’ve enjoyed the challenge. Today may be all we have, we never know about tomorrow.
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That’s a very good fist attempt. You captured the guilt and anxiety of Garrett very well. I wonder what happened to the girl!
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Thank you! Hopefully Garrett will get a second chance with his little girl.
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Good one; pulls at the heartstrings.
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Thank you, I enjoy reading your comments.
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Oh, so sad.. But well written. A real story
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Thank you! Maybe it will have a happy ending.
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